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Post by midna on May 20, 2011 21:00:54 GMT -5
ok i know the title isnt that great. and it dosnt really make sense but it will make sense once you have read the start of my story
Chapter 1
“Kick her out kick her out, she doesn’t belong here” they shouted in what seemed like a chant “She is one of us regardless” said my mother “Kick her out kick her out, she doesn’t belong here” they shouted in chant ignoring my mother “She is still a part of our family” said Christ “Kick her out kick her out, she doesn’t belong here” they shouted in chant ignoring Christ, this is bad they rarely ever ignore Christ “You should love your sister, it shouldn’t matter if she is different from you all” said our leader, god “kick her out kick her out, she doesn’t belong here” the angels shouted in chant, they where even ignoring god - by the way god is actually the name we give to our leader he is also the person some people worship on earth though he didn’t create the earth he just runs heaven- they never ignore god. I think now’s the right time to let you all know why the angels want me kicked out of heaven, I’m a vangel. half vampire half angel, like all angels I slowly aged until I turned sixteen –that’s when angels stop ageing- a few years later I found out that I’m half vampire, I shifted into my other form which is mostly like a vampire expect I have pure black angel wings, my angel form however is exactly like an angel -weird- I almost died when I shifted into my vampire form because vampires can’t live in heaven -lucky I can easily control the shifts, most the time- after that only a few angels stayed by my side. my mother -that should be obvious-, my best friend –scarlet-, my fiancé –Lucas- , Christ -who is an angel, now anyway- and god. Lucas and scarlet disappeared not long after I found out that I’m half vampire, the other angels said they had gone to earth. I knew they weren’t –I would of been able to sense there auras if that was true- I checked with god he said he hasn’t approved of anyone going to earth. My mother also told me the story of how she and my father met; apparently she had been on her first –and only- trip to earth. What my father did to her, I promise he will pay some day. “Enough!” I shouted at the top of my voice “I’ll go to earth” “Are you sure young angel” said god “I am, just give me a little time to pack” I said “Very well” with that I left to pack. Hearing the angels’ cheers as I walked towards my house I almost started to cry
I wasn’t planning on taking much, just a book of angel legends, and my notebook. I had just put the books into a small back pack when my mother walked in “I’m going to miss you sky” she said “Me to mother” I hugged her “I have something for you” she opened her hands and in them she had a pure white rose “Mother that isn’t the....” She cut me off “yes it’s the pure rose” the pure rose is a magic rose witch my father gave my mother when they met. Apparently it’s meant to change colour depending on what creature holds it. “Mother I couldn’t” “When your father gave me you he said, one day she will go to earth and when she goes to earth give her this rose” as she spoke she put the rose in my hair. The thorns of the rose wrapped themselves around my hair holding it in place. “Thank you mother” I grabbed my backpack and left my house, to the gates of heaven. Leaving the only life I have ever know behind me as I left heaven.
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Post by hyrulianblackcat on May 20, 2011 21:07:52 GMT -5
Wow. That's great! I see several grammatical errors, but those can be over looked. I can't wait for more!
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maybe they arnt so bad
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Post by wdw4 on May 21, 2011 19:05:23 GMT -5
realy one thing i dont like about bolth of u guys books is that its 1st person
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Post by midna on May 21, 2011 19:09:34 GMT -5
Whats wrong with first person
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maybe they arnt so bad
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Post by wdw4 on May 21, 2011 19:26:50 GMT -5
im just used to 3rd person
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Post by midna on May 21, 2011 19:57:33 GMT -5
Fair enough
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Post by midna on May 21, 2011 21:35:31 GMT -5
chapter 2
I landed softly, in a dark forest. I folded my wings back up against me. Angels are a rare creature on earth and can be hunted for their wings. I also shifted into my vampire form. When I shift my light brown hair changes to pure black, my sky blue eyes turn to blood red, my skin –which is already pale- becomes as white as snow and I grow fangs but this time something else changed. The rose my mother had given me changed from being pure white to blood red. I also noticed that in my vampire form I was stronger and faster. I softly taped a tree and it fell into the river beside it. Walking was more like what a human athlete would be like running at their limit. It was strange being in my vampire form but it was safer on earth then my angel form. I heard someone behind me. So I unfolded my wings then said “whoever’s there you better come out now” I looked around and there was a vampire. He looked in shock. “H...h...how can you have wings” he stammered. “I have wings because I’m not a normal vampire” I said “now what do you want” “I just wanted to talk. You looked so beautiful in the moonlight” the vampire blushed slightly –most people think vampires can’t blush ah wrong- “Thank you” I said only one other male had ever called me beautiful before “I’m sorry if I scared you” I folded my wings back up against my body “it’s cool” said the vampire “oh the names James” he had the same skin and eyes as me but his hair was a dark brown that almost looked black, he also had a very lean build but I could see that he was also strong, and he seemed to have an Australian accent “Sky” I held out my hand. He took it “So you ganna tell me why you have wings” “I’m half angel” he cracked up laughing “Yeah right” he said when he could breathe again “half angel that’s impossible” “Not impossible just improbable” “Prove it” I sighed and shifted back into my angel form “oh my god you are half angel” “Told you” I said “So what ya doin’ on earth” “Stupid up themself uptight angels that’s why” he looked confused so I told him the short version story “the angels kicked me out because I’m half vampire” I shook my head at that. “I thought angels were all good and acceptin’ and stuff” “Yeah there accepting “I said sarcastically “if your an angel” “Well that must suck I mean being alone while all the angels hate you” “Not all the angels hate me my mother loves me. Same with my fiancé and best friend” “Dam your engaged. Didn’t the bloke stand up for you leavin’ and all” “My best friend and fiancé disappeared after I found out I’m half vampire, and it wouldn’t of mattered they weren’t even listening to Christ or our leader god” “Wait gods real” “Yeah but he didn’t create earth like a lot of people on earth think” “So who’s your father?” “Not you that’s for sure” he laughed a little at my bad joke “I don’t know where my father is I never met him. I hope for his sake I don’t ever meet him” “Why don’t ya want to meet him?” “Let’s just say he didn’t treat my mother right” by the look on his face, I must of looked scary “oh I’m sorry I didn’t mean to scare you” “Nah its cool” he said “so you need someone to show you around the forest” I nodded and he walked besides me telling me everything about the forest.
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Post by midna on May 28, 2011 16:52:24 GMT -5
chapter 3
We walked in the forest for what seemed like hours. He even introduced me to a few other creatures –most of them vampires- humans are really stupid thinking that us mythical creatures are all loners when we’re actually really social. We talk to each other regardless of species -well most the time anyway- none of the others seemed to notice I was part angel. They just thought I was just a normal every day vampire. Witch was cool with me the less attention I got the better. After a while I noticed that there weren’t any lycans in the forest “hey why aren’t there any lycans here” I asked “I mean I know I umm lived far from here but I use to see lycans all over the place” James expression turned almost angry and more than a little scary “vampires and lycans have been enemies for as long as I can remember” he said in a tone that reflected the expression on this face “maybe even longer then I have been alive” I kept walking along side him making a mental note to try and make lycans and vampires friends again. Eventually we approached a small house in the middle of the forest “my home” was all James said. He let me inside “you can stay here as long as you like” I smiled up at him and said “thanks” it was a nice place. It was bigger than it looked. It had a small living room with a few couches and a table in the middle. There was no TV but I never liked TV much. By the looks of it there were two bedrooms one for him and one for a guest. The only electrical appliance was a fridge witched I opened to find full of blood I looked up at him. He looked a little embarrassed “I don’t like to bite people if I can help it” I shut the fridge door shrugged then followed him to see the rest of the house. I was right about there being two bedrooms. His bedroom was simple a nice big bed –witch made me wonder what he wanted it for- and a closet which must be full of his clothes. The second bedroom was set up in much the same way but with a smaller bed –it was still big enough for two people though .maybe even three- once we returned to the living room we sat down “sorry about there not being a bathroom personally I’ve always prefer washing in the river” he smiled a cheeky smile then continued “it’s a much better view” I made a look of disgust at him. I didn’t know he was a perv. He just laughed then said “I’m only kidding around but it does have a great view what with all the trees and wildlife and the waterfall and all” I smiled at him glad to know it was only a joke –if a rather disturbing one- “so how come there are so many vampires here I mean wouldn’t you rather be living around humans so you have fresh blood” I asked “Meh most vampires don’t like cities much I mean there way to busy and this place is just so nice” I nodded in agreement there was something I liked about this place I just wasn’t sure what it was. Just then I heard a knock on the door “wonder who that is” I heard James mumble as he got up to open the door “matt” he said as he opened the door “Yo dude. Man been way too long—“the new guy, matt, stopped talking as he saw me “aww man you get all the hot chicks” I blushed a little as matt walked into the room. “Yeah I just met her today she’s new to the forest” said James. I smiled at him grateful for him keeping my secret. “Hi” I said “I’m sky” “Matt” said the new guy as he held out his hand. I took it and shook it once. Matt was an ok guy to look at. He had the same skin and eye colour as James’s –hello all vampires have that-but his hair was a sandy blonde colour and he was big and very muscular. matt turned to look at James then said “god dude how do you get these chicks I mean look at this one I have never seen such a good looking vampire hopefully you have saved some for me” I went up to matt and pulled at the his hair making him fall to the ground. Then said “look here I’m not some toy that can be passed on and for your information me and James are just friends” I threw matt to the over end of the room. I always hated pervs. He looked at me almost in shock. Once he snapped out of it he said “did she just get ten times hotter or is it just me” I gave him a really dirty look. James took one look at me then said to matt “Ok dude I suggest you leave her alone I think she’s about to rip your head off” “No way dude. No way a chick could take me I’m the strongest guy I’m the forest” that is about the most sexist thing I have ever heard I walked right up to him. Punched him hard in the face then kicked him twice as hard in his balls. He started to cry out “ok I give I give” I walked away and sat on the couch “man I hate it when chicks play dirty” “James if you don’t get your friend away from me in ten seconds I am going to kill him” I didn’t say it meanly like he had to do it. It was more like a suggestion that he might be better off doing. James nodded then said “come on dude time for you to go” he helped matt up and showed him to the door “come on man” said matt “when did you start letting chicks tell you what to do instead of making them do what you want” matts smile almost turned evil “were is the James I knew who use to screw at least three chicks a day. I haven’t seen or heard you bang a chick in months” he pushed matt out the door then slammed the door on this face “god I hate it when he brings up that past” said James as he came to sit next to me. “Did you really use to screw three girls in one day” I asked. He just looked at the ground almost ashamed “you don’t have to tell me if you don’t want to” I said. He shook his head then said “this was when I was human and continued on when I became a vampire. Up until a few months ago me and matt would go around and....” I waited for him to finish for a while but he never did so I said “and...” “And we use to force women to have sex with us. Sometimes it was just me or him screwing a girl but most the time it was both of us at the same time” I looked at him completely disgusted “I’m not that kind of person any more I promises you that” I looked at the ground thinking about what to say to him finally I settled on just saying “I believe you” then I hugged him. It was a friendly hug. I was just trying to comfort him. Under his breath he mumbled “thank you” then looked up at me and smiled. There was a connection between us I wasn’t sure how or what that connection was but it was there and it was really confusing.
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Post by midna on May 31, 2011 18:42:53 GMT -5
chapter 4
Later that night as I lay down to sleep I had a really weird dream. In that dream there were two sides. One light one dark. I was standing in the middle of the two sides. So I was half covered in light half in darkness. On each side there was a man facing away from me, so I couldn’t see their faces. The man on the light side said “come back with me. Back to heaven. Back to the life you knew. Give up the darkness. Give up your vampire side. Embrace the light. Become a full angel”. After then man on the light side stopped talking the man on the dark side said “do not give up who you are. As the light makes you who you are so does the darkness. Darkness isn’t always evil just as light always isn’t good. Light and darkness are just opposites. But being opposite’s means that one cannot possibly with without the other. You think you are always fighting inside you. That the light and darkness are fighting. But in truth you are the perfect balance of light and darkness” as the man in the dark finished both he and the man in the light turned. It was Lucas and James. James finished “I will not force you to choose” At the same time Lucas said “you have no choice but to choose and you will choose me and the light”. I woke strangely calm but unsure of what the dream meant.
chapter 5
A few months passed after my strange dream. I was still living with James. He was so nice and regardless of his past he hadn’t tried to even flirt with me. I seemed to be finding myself liking him more and more each day. I enjoyed his company. Sometimes that dude matt would come over and that is when I would leave and go for a walk in the forest. Actually that’s why I’m out walking right now. Matt had come over and he really doesn’t like me nor do I like him. All he talks about when he’s over is the newest girl which he has fucked with and if I’m around I always end up beating him up. A strange noise stoped my mental rant. I turned to look at where it had come from. Unlike when I had first met James I didn’t open my wings –I didn’t want people knowing what I really am- instead I just yelled out “whoever you are come out now so I don’t have to hurt you!” I watched the place where I had heard the noise and slowly a human came out...... no it wasn’t human it was a half human half wolf thing “you a lycan” the wolf thing nodded showing its teeth in a gruesome smile. Its voice was rough as it spoke “indeed I am, young vampire, you are on my land I suggest you leave A.S.A.P” “I was just passing through I often walk out here” I said to the lycan “but I have never seen you out here” the lycan acted as if it didn’t hear me and continued talking in its hideous growling voice “you don’t run from me how curious most vampires will run from a lycan” the lycan sniffed at the air “but then again you don’t smell like a normal vampire” it shrugged “oh well a vampire is a vampire” it smiled evilly then said “this should be fun” it growled then began to pounce on me. Luckily I was able to speared my wings and fly in the air before it could tackle me. It stared at me in shock then said “how are you able to have wings and fly, vampire” as it talked it slowly shifted into its human form and started talking normally. I smiled as I spoke “as you said I’m not a normal vampire. I’m half angel” as I landed on the ground I saw a look of utter disbelief come across his face. Now that he wasn’t covered in hair I could tell it was a he. The lycan’s human form had tanned skin, and black eyes. His hair was the same colour as his eyes. He also had the same sort of build to him as James did, all fit and lean. When the lycan finally spoke he said “you are a vampire so you are my enemy but you are an angel so you are not” he sounded totally confused I smiled a friendly smile at him as I spoke “I’m not your enemy. I have never tried to hurt you. My only enemies are the stupid angels who banished me for no good reason” the lycan smiled at me. Then walked closer to me as he held out his hand “I’m Blake” I took his hand and shook it once “Sky” “It’s a perfect name for you” said Blake “so how did you become half angel half vampire?” “Thanks, oh and if it’s easier just call me a vangel, and I was born this way” “Seriously so is your mum or dad a vamp” “Dad’s a vamp mums an angel” “Do you know who your dad is?” “Nope” “Cool so where’re you staying cause you can come crash in my den if you want” “I’m actually staying with a vampire friend. He found out I’m half angel almost the exact same way you did. By me getting defensives” “You’re staying with a vamp. You sure that’s safe” “Dude I’m half vampire” “Good point” “Want to meet James” “The vamp” “Yeah” “Not so sure if that’s a good idea” “Why not” “You may not have noticed that vamps and lycan’s don’t really get along” “So.... maybe you should try being the bigger person and try to get along with a vamp. Besides your getting along with me just fine” “Yeah but your only a half vamp so it doesn’t really count” “How does it not count? I mean I need blood to live and stuff” “Yeah but you still have them huge wings and can fly and stuff” “And I could kick your butt” I said teasingly “Nah no way in a million years” he said just as teasingly “Want to bet” we just cracked up laughing for no good reason. Even though I had just met Blake I knew I could trust him. It was a lot like how I felt about James. “So you ganna come meet James or what” He smiled then said “sure” with that we walked off into the forest, in the direction or James’s house
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Post by hyrulianblackcat on May 31, 2011 21:32:34 GMT -5
What happened to chapter 4?
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Post by midna on Jun 1, 2011 3:23:12 GMT -5
Oopsie wrote the wrong numbers lol
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