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Post by iamlink on Apr 19, 2011 15:15:28 GMT -5
Full Name: Shadow
Age: 12
Gender: Male
Race: Hylian
Appearance: Thin, 5' 2". Wears a very dark grey hooded cloak. Rarely shows his face from under the hood. When he does, it is either to show his rage, or a sign of affection, when he has a smile on his face. He has blue eyes that can either strike fear into your Heart, or show his caring for someone. If he is sad, his eyes, when gazed into, will show his soul. The rest of his face is smooth, and his hair is a VERY dark brown. VERY dark brown.
Personality: He does not like to talk. He pretty much has three emotions; Enraged, Caring, and Depressed. He is quick to help someone he cares about. For people he doesn't care about, he will help them, sure, just not with as much swiftness or caring. Likes Darkness.
History: He does not remember anything about his past. He woke up one day to find he had a hooded cloak on, and no memory. He didn't even remember his name. He found that he was surrounded by Shadow, and now responds to that word. He will sometimes turn into a being of Shadow. This is uncontrollable. He does not know why this happens.
RP Sample: Shadow sat perched on the edge of a battlement, just like a Gargoyle. ...What to do now...? He thought. He jumped down, landing unscathed on the ground below. ...Well, there's no use sitting there... He thought. He walked off into the night...
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Post by Kairu on Apr 19, 2011 16:09:39 GMT -5
Could you please lengthen the history by 1 sentence and the sample by 2? Otherwise, it's not too bad.
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Post by Zeke Wolfe on Apr 19, 2011 16:53:18 GMT -5
Please fix a few of your sections, a few sentences you have aren't even complete sentences.
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Post by iamlink on Apr 19, 2011 16:54:33 GMT -5
Like what?
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hyrulianblackcat
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Sephira Phoenix Hylian[M:60]
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Post by hyrulianblackcat on Apr 19, 2011 17:47:57 GMT -5
In your appearance, you have a couple incomplete sentences. The last sentence for your history is also incomplete.
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Post by Kairu on May 11, 2011 17:52:16 GMT -5
With the exception of the last sentence in the personality being incomplete, it's accepted. Welcome!
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